Monday, 27 April 2020

Disappearing World part 1


BOOM!!! The whole town was shaking. Is it an earth crack says one of the people says and then. Piece by piece, the street was disappearing. And black mist spreads all over town.Where are you Doco and Gunner where are you. Tai whistles barking come down the hall and 2 dogs come  to Tai. Wait something's not right here Doco starts to bark yeah look there is like three hearts. Wow it's like where in a game let’s loot. Let’s take a backpack, dog food, a sword from my dad's collection and my knife that my mum and dad gave me before they went on another adventure. Where Eliseo was supposed to take care of me. Then again he is probably at his girlfriends house. Wait who is that he spotted a boy he looked back like he knew where I was. To be continued...

2 comments:

  1. Kia ora Tai. Thanks for adding your story to your blog. I loved how you used onomatopoeia to start your story (Boom!) and the way you left your reader in suspense at the end wondering what was going to happen next. By using fullstops and speech marks more it will help the reader know when a sentence stops and when someone is speaking. I look forward to finding out what happens next.

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    1. thank you for leting me know

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